• there was no headline (this is the #1 most read part of all copy)
• there was no qualifying information about the person who created the landing page (as in — who are you and why should I listen to you – credibility)
• it wasn’t really clear why the offer was being made (clarity is crucial)
• it didn’t spell out how it would benefit a person when the opted in (value proposition was missing)
• there was not a compelling reason why a person should  opt in (with no reason, there will be no action) 

“My first question is what is the greatest desire and PASSION of your ideal clients? What is the real, deep rooted challenge that can be touched on but not poked at?  I also noticed that the three questions leading in give readers an immediate opportunity to say “No!” and click away. You have exactly 3 seconds to capture attention, :30 seconds to engage, and 3 minutes for people to form a decision about doing business with you. I’m also curious to know what learning the steps you took will do for me? Once I know those steps, what’s going to happen? Gut instinct tells me you’d convert better with a “from the heart” video message from YOU.  Hope that helps. Feel free to ask Q’s or reach out. P.S. Are you worried about “conversion” rate (which is a sales metric) or opt in rates (lead building metric to get people on your list) or click through (potential sales metric once opted in)?” …

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Lisa Manyon

Lisa Manyon is "The Business Marketing Architect" a content and copywriting strategist for mission-driven entrepreneurs. She's the creator of the NEW marketing model for success (as seen in Inc. Magazine) that's changing the way people market today. She specializes in powerfully communicating your marketing message to increase results via Manyon Marketing Web Makeovers, website copy packages and content strategies to effectively market your business. She offers a free Copywriting Action Plan and marketing resources on her award winning blog. Her consulting and coaching is known to help produce million dollar results www.writeoncreative.com/blog